oooo wow i will be soo happy if i get to travel to china
because i love playing games and i have hipes of friends from china
and they said in china there is a lot of classic gameing
stores and u can drive real cars in a a field or something
and u need to pay maney for that
. so i wanna go china and try it out .and also i love cold places and
china is most of the time cold .so i would love to go china
Hello Dhanonjoy
ReplyDeleteIt's Araura, I really love your story it is super intresting,
Maybe you can work on the spelling along with punctuation.
It would have been great if you added a few pictures.
Anyways keep up the great work
Thanks
Araura
Greetings Dhanonjoy,
ReplyDeleteMy name is Chavda and I go to Panmure Bridge school. I am participating in the summer learning journey starting from 2018 - 2019. That's great you have made a start on the summer learning journey!
Which activity did you like doing the most? Why?
activity 3 week 1
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Hi Dhanonjoy,
ReplyDeleteIt's Leslie here, a member of the Summer Learning Journey team reading your blog from my home in Canada.
I see that you've written a free verse poem. Good for you for trying this! Poetry is bit challenging, sometimes, because it's not like writing a story or a report.
You indicate that you'd like to go to China to see it and to visit the Games stores. The theme of this activity was the smog that can be found in big cities like Beijing, so you were asked to write about how you'd feel about possibly experiencing this smoggy city. I don't think your poem talks about that. So, if you want to earn full points for this activity, I'd suggest you read the description again, and then try creating a new poem.
It's not a happy topic, smog. But it's something that we have to deal with as we all consume products from the factories that produce the toxic waste that leads to smog. So, I hope you'll try this activity again, Dhanonjoy.
And I also hope that you're having a good summer day in Auckland!!
I'll continue to enjoy reading your blog.
Cheers,
Leslie
tnq
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